I was editing last night and came across this scene. I like it a lot. What do y’all think?
Nate exhaled heavily as he pulled up a ladder back chair from the desk on the other side of the room. After sitting down he succinctly recited the events that had occurred over the past few hours. Tonya closed her eyes as the memories flooded back. Despite the death threats and mind-numbing fear, the shock of seeing Nate had somehow had more impact than the threat of being kidnapped by some international badass who wanted to kill her.
“Are you sure about all this? It just seems like it has to be some big misunderstanding. Or maybe it’s some crazy trick you’re playing on me,” she said grasping at anything to make sense of the bizarre circumstances.
“Do you really think I would make up something like that, Onion? I mean seriously. I know you’re pissed at me, and you have good reason to be, but I’d have to be one sick bastard to do something like that,” he said.
“Stop calling me that,” she snapped. The nickname brought back too many sweet memories.
“Why? Your ass is still so gorgeous it makes me want to cry.”
Vintage Nate, part courtier, part swamp rat. “Personally I wouldn’t believe you if you had your tongue notarized.”
“I might lie about some things, okay, a lot of things, but I’d never lie about your ass. Some things are sacred.”
“I’m not talking about my ass, I’m talking about this nutty situation you’ve dragged me into,” she said.
“I admit to being dishonest with you in the past. But you have to believe I wouldn’t risk your life for any reason,” he said.
Tonya sucked her teeth then took the water bottle up to finish it. The situation was totally Looney Tunes, but for some reason she did believe him. More fool her. “Can we start with simple questions? Where am I and what do you plan to do with me?”
I realized the other day that Dark Star is the first book I’ve written with flashbacks, and I’m really not sure why. Certainly reunited lovers is one of my favorite themes, but I’ve never done flashbacks before. Looking back, I think that was a problem with Try a Little Tenderness. I wrote it as essentially a two-part story because I didn’t want to tell the whole story of them meeting in flashback. That style worked for some, but didn’t work for others. I think it might have impacted the pacing.
Now with Dark Star I’m wondering if the flashbacks might be hurting the pacing as well. I don’t think the story works as well without them and there are only two, but I’m not really sure. How do y’all feel about flashbacks? Do you prefer them italicized or in regular font? Do you like them, tolerate them, or loathe them with a deadly passion? Let me know what you think.
I like creating characters. I was a lonely child and had lots of imaginary playmates. Now as a writer I get to put all those fun people down on paper. The thing that’s most interesting to me though, is the way those secondary characters tend to capture the imagination of my readers. I put in a lot of work on my primary characters. They typically have long a long backstory much of which doesn’t make it into the book. My secondary characters are typically created on the fly. Take Nate Randolph, the hero of my current WIP Dark Star. Nate was part of Tonya’s backstory, her long-lost love who takes off for the Peace Corps and is never heard from again. So when I was writing Rock Star I knew someday I’d do this story reuniting her with this secret agent man. The interesting thing is the way he popped up in Try a Little Tenderness. In that story once I’d stranded Koss and Lola on Ile de Lina, I needed a way to get them out again. As initially written Koss was going to do a rescue type thing and save Lola, but really that made no sense. Koss is one sexy geek, but he’s no commando, it seemed crazy to have him going up against professional mercenaries alone. So, I went through my catalogue of characters for a fighting man, it worked perfectly to have Nate show up and help them out. Also, Nate was talking to me incessantly the whole time I was writing Try a Little Tenderness. It was deucedly hard to finish that book because he simply wouldn’t SHUT UP! I had to put him in the book or lose my freaking mind. It wasn’t a big part, but boy did it have impact. I’ve had more emails about Nate than any other character I’ve created besides Tonya. And once I revealed that he was Tonya’s long-lost love the interest went stratospheric.
Another more recent character is Jacinto from Buttercream. He doesn’t even appear in the book, yet something about the adopted Vietnamese man with the Latino name who lives in a yurt in Kansas making goat cheese struck a chord with people. I do plan to do a whole series of novellas about this quirky little family which is near and dear to my heart, but this interest in both him, and Poppy’s sister, Daffodil caught me by surprise. I love off-beat characters and I think I’ll have a lot of fun with these ersatz hippies.
For the writers who read this blog, how about you, do you have secondary characters that have taken on a life of their own? Forcing you to write their story NOW! Readers, how do you feel about secondary characters, how much is too much? Do you enjoy having them, or are they a distraction?
Hello everyone, thanks so much for volunteering your time to be a beta reader for me. I wasn’t expecting such a huge response and really love the fact that y’all are so interested. I’ve chosen a few readers, if you’re not one of those, don’t lose heart. I’ve got more books coming and will be choosing more readers as I go. Again, thank you so much for your interest.
Dark Star will soon be at the point where I need new eyes to look it over. Looking for a few good beta readers. This doesn’t mean you have to edit the book, but you do need to be able to provide good feedback. Let me know what works and doesn’t work for you and in a timely fashion. So, if you’d like to be one of the first to get a gander at the manuscript, post in this thread. Looking forward to hearing from you.
I’ve only got a few more scenes to add and Dark Star will be finished. Then I’ll let it sit for a minute while I work on something else. I like to do that when I have time, letting a book marinate brings out all kinds of new ideas. This is especially true if I work on something else in the interim. Like right now I’m working on Dark Star, my next book, Diamonds on the River is driving me insane. When I come back to Dark Star I’ll be able to see all those typos and grammatical errors as well. For some reason, editing yourself is darned near impossible. Lisa will be editing this one for me, and she’s absolutely brutal, so I have to write clean or she’ll hurt my feelings.
I’m going to try my hand at self-publishing with Dark Star. A lot of my friends have encouraged it and I’d like to see how it turns out. I had wanted to get it out by Christmas as a gift to my fans, but I don’t know if that will be feasible. Maybe it’ll make a lovely Valentine’s Day present instead. Whit is designing an absolutely gorgeous cover that I can’t wait to share with y’all.
I’m still working very hard on Dark Star, and enjoying the hell out of the process. Something has come up though: Tonya is a young woman in her early thirties, and I’m so not a young woman in my early thirties. In fact some people think I’m my children’s grandmother. (I guess that beats people thinking I’m the nanny, but not by much). Anyway, I had to vet Tonya’s reactions fairly thoroughly because I suspect a younger woman’s tolerance for male bullshit is a lot higher than my own. At least I know that when I was young I put up with a lot of crap that leaves me wondering just what the hell was my problem back in the day.
Nowadays my bullshit threshold is practically nonexistent. Y’all know I love my husband’s dirty draws (after all I do wash them), but he knows that if he nuts up I’m like, One less egg to fry, motherfucker. As I get older I’m more that way about a lot of things. It’s definitely liberating, but when I’m creating younger characters it can be problematic. This wasn’t an issue with Let’s Do It Again. Those characters were older and had some life stripes on them. I enjoyed writing that book immensely and think I will do more with “women of a certain age.” Never fear, Tonya’s been talking in my head for so long I know I’ve got her right, but it’s a bit disconcerting to create someone who’s a decade and a half your junior. Of all the characters I’ve ever written Tonya is the one who is most like me. I didn’t realize it until I re-read Rock Star in preparation for writing this book. So yes, Tonya’s a bit of a bitch. Okay, actually Tonya is totally a bitch, but I like her. Of course, there’s a strong possibility no one else will.
So I’m driving back from having lunch with the Luke yesterday at school and this song came on the radio. I was so blown away I almost wrecked my car! (I’m not even going to get into all my friends who haven’t bothered to tell me about this group. Y’all know I don’t get out much, and thought from the name that it was some rapper. ANYWAY. I won’t make a “butters” video about y’all, THIS TIME.)
This song is unbelievable. Grown folk music that isn’t 30 years old. It’s perfect for “grown-up time” and it inspired the best love scene I’ve ever written. Tonya and Nate were the perfect couple for it and I absolutely love it.
Writing love scenes can be quite difficult (at least for me). It’s crucial to get the emotional connection, otherwise it becomes pornographic and boring, after all, inserting Flap A into Slot B isn’t particularly interesting unless you’re invested in the characters. But it’s also important to make it steamy and sexy. After all, we ARE grown. Striking the balance is not exactly easy. I often write to music, though it’s not every day that I’m inspired so strongly. Most of the time I don’t include the song in the story, though it happens occasionally, such as DMB’s “Crash” in Let’s Do It Again.
Of course, my entire writing career is inspired by music. Rock Star is essentially a love letter to Layne Staley of Alice in Chains. Many of my books are inspired by songs, Try a Little Tenderness of course and Let’s Do It Again where not only the title but even the characters names (Jack and Dyanne) are from songs I love. That whole story came from me be-bopping along in my car to the Mellencamp classic and wondering what happened to them after the song ended. Santa Baby, is obviously taken almost directly from my fave Christmas song.
I’ve got a ton of story ideas, but if I ever lack inspiration all I have to do is go through my CD collection or kick up Pandora, which by the way is as addictive as crack. The music, combined with my imagination will never let me run out of concepts. And that’s a good thing.
Anyway, I’m going to polish that love scene a bit, then I will post at least part of it for y’all.
This book has been rattling around in my head for so long that writing it feels almost like I’m channeling someone else. I haven’t had a book come this easy since…well, never. As you know I like to have people in mind for my character descriptions. These have been in my head for about six years now as well. I’m sure that neither Goapele or Galen Gering look this way now, but this is how I picture these characters in my head. Nate you might remember from Try a Little Tenderness, as he helps Lola and Koss escape from the bad guys. He’s also mentioned briefly in Rock Star. He’s Tonya’s old college boyfriend who supposedly went off to join the Peace Corps…or not. Well now it’s nearly fifteen years later and Tonya is the author of a hit mystery series. And Nate, well, right now he’s just trying to keep her from becoming a casualty of his decade-long battle with his nemesis. This story is very complex and I’ve wondered if I have the chops to write. Oh well, if I don’t I can be sure nobody else does either. So there you go.
This story was inspired by an article I read in Vanity Fair about the nefarious activities in the Triple Border region of South America. The article was written by the love of my life, Sebastian Junger and is absolutely fascinating. I’m trying to capture that same level of excitement in my book. I hope I succeed.
Right now I’m working on Let’s Do it Again. This is a funny and sexy story about a couple who had a shotgun wedding and gradually drifted apart after their kids got grown. Now they’re having a post-marital affair. It’s my first story about a grown and sexy couple, and I’ve always wanted to do one. My female lead, Dyanne, is very classy, very elegant. (Yes, I stole Dyanne Davis’s name. Mainly because I think it’s pretty, and of course, there’s a possibility that she’ll be annoyed. What can I say, I enjoy annoying people.) I think Taraji P. Henson fits the bill exactly. The guy, Jackson is Simon Baker. I’ve adored him since he was in The Guardian, so this is perfect for him.
And yes, they are Jack and Dyanne. What can I say, I love John Cougar Mellencamp and this song fits this couple to the T, especially since it was originally written about an interracial couple, and the vintage is right. It was released in 1982, this couple graduated high school shortly after that. The name of the book is of course from that old Staple Singers standard, Let’s Do it Again. I do love me some old school R&B.
Oddly enough when I first had the idea for this story, it in no way related to the Mellencamp song, that only occurred to me later how well it fit those lyrics. This is the second time that’s happened to me. The first time was with Try a Little Tenderness and the Barry Manilow song, Copacabana. Let’s hope this book is as a big a hit as that one has been.
Lisa G. came up with the idea for the Off Like a Prom Dress series. She and Sharon Cullars will also have a story, all related to prom in some way. I think it’s a great concept and hope you guys like it.